Genre: Romance

Summary: "And when once a demon wants a revenge, he gets his revenge..."

Aiden Callum, the son of a well reputed demon couple is also known as a famous businessman in the human world. His parents were killed ruthlessly by a demon-hunter when he was barely ten and now he seeks revenge from the daughter of the now deceased hunter, but will he be successful in crushing her mind and soul? Or would love obstruct his path? Read more to find out in this sensual tale of modern romance and revenge~

+ Cover

I don't need you to ask you to change it. You already said it's temporary but still, it's better if you change it as quickly as you can

Rating: 4/10

+ Title

Not original, not bad. It gives a 'dark and dangerous' vibe.

Rating: 6/10

+ Summary

Short and to the point. Good work.

Rating: 7/10

+ Plot

Unique in few ways, mainstream in some. But still a very hot romance.

Rating: 7/10

+ Characters

Evangeline: Mary-sue. Sorry to say it but that's the first thing that came to my mind as I read the story. You can make her a more light and fun- loving character and less Mary-sue like.

Aiden: Typical bad boy persona.

They aren't intriguing enough. They need to have their own personal characteristics in order to capture the attention of the readers.

Rating: 5/10

+Chapters

Length: This seems fine.

Grammar, etc: There are a lot of errors. They are all minor ones but it would make for a smoother read if you edit them soon.

General:

They seem to be too fast paced. A little focus on the details would be appreciated.

The change in the P.O.V of the characters (Second chapter when she enters the office it jumps from her P.O.V to his) is unprofessional.

The idea itself is very interesting and can be manipulated in such a way that it brings a whole lot intrigue into the story.

This story is supposed to be a hot romance; utilise that completely. You can put in a lot of scenes that will make the readers beg for more.

One thing is Evangeline. Sh sounds like the typical Mary-sue character; shy, scared, insecure about her looks and always ready to obey and go along with whatever he demands of her. She reminds me of Bella Swan from Twilight (and that is NOT a good thing)

Giving her a bit of backbone won't hurt. I don't mean she has to talk back or do anything crazy. Just small things.

For eg; the part where she goes for the meeting.

She enters the office and her eyes are immediately drawn towards the man standing in front of the desk. His hands are buried in his pant pockets but his onyx eyes pin her to the spot.

She swallows, her eyes unconsciously trailing all over his body, cataloguing his features. It was safe to say that she hadn't met anyone as handsome as he was.

There was a kind of animal magnetism about him that was apparent despite the distance between them.

He is tall with his hair artfully tousled, a few strands falling into his eyes. She notices that he is studying her the same way she is studying him and she can't help but blush.

"I read your details, you seem to be eligible to be my assistant."

It sounded like he is hiring her but she didn't let her hope rise yet. There are various other candidates seated outside who looked more suited for the job.

"But you have to......"

She blinks and realises that she is hired. Relief flooded her body when she thinks about the fact that she doesn't need to worry about how she would feed herself anymore.

"Am I clear?" He asks and she tilts her head up, trying to appear confident.

"Yes, Sir." Her voice comes out a bit low.

"Am. I. Clear?" He asks again, closing the distance between them. She gulps and moves back a few steps.

"Yes, Sir." She repeats, her voice louder than before.

"Good. You are hired......."

She hates the way he speaks to her, like she is worthy of his respect. She feels like frowning but she knows that this would only infuriate him more.

And she needs this job.

She nods and he turns around, in a clear sign of silent dismissal.

Resisting the urge to act childish by poking her tongue out at his back, she slowly leaves the office.

She recognises that he is attractive but also sees that his attitude isn't all that nice. She needs to have a backbone.

Other than that, the story can go a long way if executed right so do your best!

+ Conclusion

Very hot romantic story. With a bit of editing it would be an amazing read.

+ Overall Rating

7.5/10