Genre: Short Story

Summary: a boy's life is ruined because of a girl, but he still loves her despite it all. be prepared to have your heart die a little after every chapter and please keep tissues with you at all times.

+ Cover

Amazing. Really suits the mood of the story and is also quite attractive.

Rating: 9/10

+ Title

Very, very fitting.

Rating: 9/10

+ Summary

I think you can make it a bit more melancholic.

Use more poetic words.

Story of a boy with broken heart who still loves the girl who shattered it with all the pieces.

Story of a girl hungry for popularity that she turned a blind eye to her conscience.

Story of a fragile girl who loved the boy who hated himself so much that it killed her.

Something of that sort. But still amazing.

Rating: 8/10

+ Chapters

Length: Perfect!

Grammar: Needs work but only minor editing

General:

When you first said that I would need tissues by my side, I admit I scoffed. It takes a lot to move me to tears and this definitely did not.

But you know what it did?

It kept me glued to my screen until the last chapter.

This is a beautiful piece of writing despite a fee grammatical errors and I am so happy I got a chance to read this.

I would advise you to use present tense to make it seem even more powerful. Like in the first chapter.

He sees her in the hallway with her tiny fingers intertwined with his.

I feel it has more of an impact.

Other than that, DAMN! It's been quite some time since any story sucked me in so much. Normally I read the first few chapters and write the review due to time restraint but with your story I found that I couldn't stop reading.

I had to know what happened.

So I read it until the last.

The short length helped a lot and I enjoyed reading it. Maybe I am some kind of masochist but I really enjoy angst and tragedy. I feel like there is more depth in those kind of stories than normal ones.

My heart broke for Jasmine. Like it really, really did. I love, love her and I want to hug her.

I think this story sends out the message that Monsters don't only hide under our bed or inside our head but they can be in form of someone we love too.

All in all it is a perfect story that showcases the #freeyourbody tag nicely.

+ Conclusion

I urge everyone to give this story a try. It is amazing and I was glued until the last chapter.

+ Overall Rating

9.5/10