Title: Ten & Levan

Author: HayleyMonroe

Genre: Humor

Summary:

Levan is the night
Ten is the light

Levan is the ground
Ten is the high

Tenerife Cohen is the girl who wanted life.
Levan Emery is the boy who wanted to die.

Two completely different lives.
What happens when they collide?

When Ten meets Levan,
It's gonna be a pocketful of hell
And a pocketful of heaven.

Reviewer: angelyntjf

Review:

1. One

I love their meeting. I find it really adorable and humorous although the situation screams anything but. I can really feel Levan's pain and despair and I love the effect Ten has on him, even if it's just their first meeting. I love your description too. I find it really well written and I can see everything play out vividly in my head. I did realise, however, that you tend to be a bit redundant at some point. Like, at one point you said "against the cage for a chest I have". I feel like it could easily be shortened to "against my chest" or "against my rib cage" and it'll make the whole thing sounds better. I know it's hard to cut down on unnecessary words. Even I have trouble doing that. But trust me, it works wonders. I do really love your oxymoron metaphor thing though.

2. Two

Tbh I prefer reading in Ten's pov haha. I love her voice, how she's so bold and brave and she's so adorable and not afraid to stand up for herself and for the people around her. I love the depth of your character and how you developed Ten over the course of the chapter. I love seeing the vulnerable side of her at the end with her mother. It really broke my heart. I love your description once again and how well everything flowed.

3. Three

Hahaha I really enjoyed this chapter. I love the humour and the drama from Ten. I also love how you manage to make both voices so distinct. I get that it's kinda hard at times especially if you're doing it in the same book but you have seemed to nail it so kudos to you on that! I love how you portrayed Ava and how Levan wants to and will look after her, especially from their father. It really warms my heart. I also love how vulnerable Levan is. Great chapter!

4. Four

I love how different Ten and Levan are. They complement each other so well. I love how you've developed your characters and their relationship since they met so kudos to you on that. I really enjoyed this chapter and I especially love seeing how Ten sees Levan and vice versa in Levan's chapters.

Overall:

I really did enjoy the book. I love the humour and I love the contrasting thoughts and voices of Ten and Levan and how you alternate between them. There's not much I can comment about your writing. But there's always room for improvement. Just keep that in mind. Also, can I say? Your blurb is really on point. It's so hard to write blurbs that captivate so great job. I think, right now, it comes down to a matter of preference, whether your readers enjoy this kind of book or not. I do hope you find this helpful.

Rating: 4.5/5

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