Author:Popsy_Grl

Reviewer:SagarikaKhanna

Title: She met her gentlemen

Genre:  Short Story/ Romance

My take on your story:
Summary and Title: The summary always decides the fate of your story. If a summary is well-written, then your story will certainly be well received. I found your summary to be a little dull. I feel that you should inject some life into it. Instead of starting your premise with this line ,' Ashbalia is the  beloved daughter of Swaleha...' You could have framed it like this, 'She grew up believing in fairytales and happy endings. "I'll never find the man of my dreams! All the boys are uncouth!" She wailed.' I have some concerns regarding the title of your story. I feel that the story deserves a better title. An alternative could be , 'How I met met my Prince Charming? '

Cover: The old adage that people should not judge a book by its cover is null and void here on Wattpad. All readers judge a book by its cover. It is not the summary but the cover that attracts readers. I feel that you or your designer should redesign the cover. The cover is adorable but childish.

Story Content: We will now confront the elephant in the room, the story content. The story sadly does not provide us with a prologue. A short prologue of about 500 words could do wonders for your story. In my opinion, the prologue (that should have existed)
should provide the readers with an introduction to both the male and female protagonists.  A good prologue could start at the point where Ashbalia meets her prince or it could be structured in such a way that it segues into the epilogue. You need to work on your writing style. The lack of imagery, detail and description is daunting. The words that do not belong to the English language should be italicized and their meanings should be explained. In Chapter 1, I wonder about  Ashbalia's physical appearence . I also wonder about the identity of the other characters. Introduction of too many characters in the first chapter is not advisable. There are grammatical errors. Inconsistencies in the punctuation and formation  of certain sentences have been noted. You could check out @NewStoriesLibrary for editing. Overall, the plot was good. All the best for your book my friend,
Popsy_Grl .
Rating: 7/10
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