Reviewer: SagarikaKhanna

Author: abyssxx

Title: Serenity

Genre: Teen Fiction
My take on your story:

Cover: When I observed the cover, I did not find it to be in sync with the setting of the story. The picture selected by you or your designer does not reflect the mood of your story. A book is always judged by a cover. I advise you to invest in a better cover. You can try out our cover designing section.

Summary: I feel the summary is cute. It creates an aura of mystery around your story. But I found it to be incomplete. The paragraph written by you could be followed by a short instance from your story so that the readers don't feel confused. The new extension could be an introduction of sorts of your characters.

Story Content:
The prologue is short. It lacks details. As a reader, I would want to know who is Adelaine. I would to know whether the chapter is in the point of view of Adelaine or your male protagonist. Clarity of thought is necessary. Some details like, 'I remember how well trimmed her hair used to be' could be replaced by I remember the swish of her hair, her rosy cheeks, dancing eyes and her sunny smile...' I hope my suggestions were helpful.

Rating: 7/10
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