I Crave a Saviour - starhavens -

Reviewed by Tulsi107

A B O U T :

Never in a thousand years, Ellen would have ever guessed, her life will going to be flipping around after a mysterious surprise. Living on her own terms for nearly a decade, leave her perplex when she can't seem to help but change every belief she had after meeting a not so ordinary man.

R E V I E W:

Okay lets start off with your introduction of your book! You do a great job of telling us who Ellen is and then slowly introduce in Eric. It's very pleasant to read about how the two lives are different.

Something you do really well in your chapters is that you have bold and strong characters. That's a really big positive - because it's easier for me to remember who is who. You show certain characteristics of Ellen and it sticks right with me!

Now, aha, this is something that really, really sticks out to me! And that is... swearing! You seem to have a lot of swearing in your book/cussing. And I don't see it as a problem if the type of readers you have are okay with it. Swearing is meant to be used to emphasize perhaps a character or a situation, but I see that you used it about 3-4 times in every chapter. After a while, it does get quite disturbing. However, if you feel like it works with you, then there's no stopping!

Something I'd like to point out is that there are too many dialogues in one paragraph. That's something you should concentrate on; condense the paragraph lengths because that discourages readers from reading your book. If a dialogue starts, separate it. BUT don't have 4-5 in each paragraph. Like I tell a lot of people, you aren't getting fined if you add more paragraphs!

Second chapter is very strong, I liked that there was a lot of improvement in grammar and punctuation. Well done, and keep up the great work with this book and the others!

R A T I N G:
3/5 stars.

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