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#Review 11

Title: Green Troubles
Type: Fem!Deku AU
Author: racheltodd1234

Green Troubles
=
Deku

It was a good title! Really fit Deku! :D

Also, the first letter of a title should be in capital letter form, so it is Green Troubles (A Female Deku Story)

It's Deku not deku. First letter of a name should be in capital letter form.

Description is cliche but okay. Still got its own uniqueness there.

"What can a small kid like you do?"

A bit typo there.

"Wouldn't it be a shame if I ruin your entire life as a hero? Let's go punk." He says.

The sentence is in present tense, not past tense.

"Yeah, I just feel a little bit hurt, that's all."

I think is the correct sentence.

What to Improve

- There are many grammatical/spelling mistakes and it started to bother me a bit

- Your writing style is normal. Simple words and sentence. Easy to understand the situation. Good. 👍

- Plot isn't escalating too fast which is great.

Overall: Fix the grammatical/spelling errors and everything will be solved. Your story is already interesting so don't worry. ^^

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