#Review 11
Title: Green Troubles
Type: Fem!Deku AU
Author: racheltodd1234
Green Troubles
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Deku
It was a good title! Really fit Deku! :D
Also, the first letter of a title should be in capital letter form, so it is Green Troubles (A Female Deku Story)
It's Deku not deku. First letter of a name should be in capital letter form.
Description is cliche but okay. Still got its own uniqueness there.
"What can a small kid like you do?"
A bit typo there.
"Wouldn't it be a shame if I ruin your entire life as a hero? Let's go punk." He says.
The sentence is in present tense, not past tense.
"Yeah, I just feel a little bit hurt, that's all."
I think is the correct sentence.
What to Improve
- There are many grammatical/spelling mistakes and it started to bother me a bit
- Your writing style is normal. Simple words and sentence. Easy to understand the situation. Good. 👍
- Plot isn't escalating too fast which is great.
Overall: Fix the grammatical/spelling errors and everything will be solved. Your story is already interesting so don't worry. ^^
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