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#Review 08

Title:
Type: Yakuza AU
Author: BNHABIGFAN

Title: At first I thought he was gonna become a villain, but it turn out he became a hero but still a yakuza- I'm fine with it.

Description: Your description is good but the grammar is out of the question.

What to Improve

- Okay, I noticed you have lots of grammatical errors and spellings when I read your fanfic. The first letter of a person's name should be in capital form.

Example:

Izuku
Inko

- Put space between a dialogue and sentence and again, use capital letter at the beginning of a new sentence.

Example:

"No..." Answers Izuku while crying.

- Add punctuation marks ( ! , ?) in each dialogue to express more emotions and feelings. A sentence without these marks make the sentence sounds dull, emotionless and plain.

Example:

"Hey, may I come in?" Asked Izuku.

- Story's plot is quite rushing but that doesn't mean you need to change it. Just, when you are starting a new book, make sure not to escalate the story too fast.

Overall: There are many things you need to fix and improve especially the grammatical and spelling errors. I advise you to do lots of English exercise to improve your English.

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