Title: Emotional
Type: BNHA OC Story
Author: plush08

Title: A simple word that decribe the whole story and character. I LOVE IT!

Description: Let me be honest. I was extremely SHOOKETH when I read the description. She is daughter of AFO?! No wonder the title is Emotional. Your OC must have been through a lot. You did a great job there. ^~^

What to Improve

- Alright, so when it comes to Someone's POV, I suggest you to use other font to signify the change of POV. It looks more neat and professional. You can either use them like this:

Kanjo's POV
Kanjo's POV
Kanjo's POV
Kanjo's POV

Also, you need to put this ( ' ) symbol when you are describing a person's point of view. ^^

- I found many spelling errors in your book. Be alert of this and quickly fix it. You can proof read the chapter first before publishing to check on grammatical or spelling mistakes.

- Alright, dialogue between two or more characters are important for the story! Whenever you are starting a new dialogue, make sure to make a new paragraph/line to avoid confusion. It was hard to read when the dialogues are close to each other.

- So, the words. You use some wrong words in the sentence. For example;

I said why blushing in embarrassment.

The correct sentenc is:

I said while blushing in embarrassment.

So make sure to be careful and fix the mistakes.

- Use capital letter whenever starting a new sentence/dialogue.

- Put spaces when you start a new paragraph.

- There are a bit grammatical errors. I advise you to read more English books / do grammar excercises everyday to improve.

Plot: I think the plot is a too rushing. I won't spoil here but let's slow down a little bit. No need to give so many details of the story. Just a small hint in each chapter is enough to give the thrill the readers want.