Username: Savi0207
Title: Girl-friends
Reviewer: ebrus999

Title (4/5)

I like the title a lot, it is simple and also questioning, like are they 'girl friends' or 'girlfriends', and I was eager to find out

Cover(2/5)

This cover was not it. First of all the text did not match the cover in any way and it seems like it was too big for Wattpad which made it messy and unappealing to me. The size was wrong and the picture was of very low quality

Blurb(6/10)

The blurb was good, it made me curious and hungry for more, though it could be edited a bit more

Character development (8/15)

There was little to no character development in the book, the only character that we got a taste of their personality was Maya, and that was disappointing, I also feel like they could have been introduced to more characters.

Plot and story flow (7/15)

The story has a nice plot but unfortunately, it was not executed well, this is because a plot worthy of being an amazing novel was made a short story and as so left so many plot holes.
They could have been more backstory on both characters, they're online friendship could have been developed more. And the process of their developing feelings could've been shown more and also their interactions or relationship with the few side characters introduced.

Creative and writing style(10/15)

Your writing style is okay, simple. But one thing I noticed was that you seemed to be struggling with the description when it comes to intimate scenes, my advice would be to study other people's work that is similar to yours and try and model yours. Also when it comes to these scenes, use words that invoke emotions and reactions from the reader, this is lacking and it makes the scene look plain.

Vocabulary(6/10)

Just like have explained earlier, try working with synonyms and words that add color and pizzazz. Also, try avoiding the use of very, I noticed you used it a lot.

Grammar and spelling(5/10)

The grammar and spelling errors were very noticeable and that's a major turn off for a reader, I suggest downloading the app Grammarly, it would help in correcting your spelling, punctuation, and grammar mistakes when writing

Interaction with readers(5/5)

You successfully built a beautiful relationship with your readers, you responded to all their comments, and made an author note at the end of every chapter, you also took their advice into consideration, nice job!

Overall review(6/10)

don't leave this book as a Short story please, there's so much development that could be made to turn it into a masterpiece.
While reading I could see the amazing plot and I can't wait to read it when it's executed perfectly

Total score: 59/100

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Hope this review was helpful