Title: Finding Orion
Author: VictoriaSlater457
Genre: Mystery/ Thriller
Position: Second Place
Reviewer: CrownedMadness

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✨ TITLE✨

The title is succinct and mystery-esque. 'Finding Orion' is possibly connoting the protagonist Jason Carver aka The Orion, trying to find himself after the memory loss and/or that Agent Marks is assigned to find The Orion.

I think it's clever but the title on its own is a little bit generic. 'Finding [insert name]' format is rather overused and cliché.

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✨COVER✨

The book cover is done in a classic action-thriller movie poster style. It's relevant to the plot of the novel as well. The white of the man's shirt contrasts against the dark-blueish background, and I liked the typography as well.

The addition of the white text makes the whole cover cohesive. The only thing that irks me is the size of the subtitle. It's hard to read on mobile devices.

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✨BLURB✨

The blurb is well-written and intriguing. There's a proper amount of information laid out to hook the readers. The only weak spot is certain sentences that I felt could be reconstructed to convey what you mean better.

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✨WRITING STYLE✨

The opening of the prologue was unexpected in a good way, and leaves you wanting to know more. The narrative is intriguing and suspenseful, and even serves to set the stage and gives build-up for the skilled assassin The Orion. But, there are some unclear and missing details. For example, the butler's appearance was out of nowhere and the transition makes it seem like John is the butler. But, overall, the prologue leaves you with some questions that I hope will be answered in later chapters.

The writing style is apt for this genre, and the author is gifted at writing action sequence. There's the right amount of description and details. Except at a few places, I'd noticed the author tend to skip or miss some details which cause confusion and minor inconsistencies.

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✨ CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT✨

The characters are distinguishable and kind of has their own voice. Jason Carver gives me a Jason Bourne vibe, and you've achieved to portray his skillset rather well. The one suggestion I've got is to showcase his inner conflicts that comes with losing memory, and also how much does he remember?

John, on the other hand, has a typical mafia leader vibe. He's cold and calculating. I also like that he has a pet eagle; that's an interesting element to the story.

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✨ THINGS YOU CAN WORK ON✨

The book could use some cleaning grammar-wise. There's punctuation mishaps and at few places, I felt the sentence structure could be better.

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Aside the flaws that can be improved upon, 'Finding Orion' seems like a good action-thriller read. Keep writing!

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