The winner is. . .

ThisMustBeDestiny

The details were amazing and I'm very impressed. It easy to read, and well spaced.

@http-luciana

I'm sorry you didn't win. I did love your story idea. But I'm going to give you a bit of constructive criticism quickly. Even when writing short stories like that, you should space it out a bit. After someone speaks, start a new paragraph. It's just neater and it earns you more points.

I know both of you said there would be more parts to your story, and I really like that you enjoy the topic enough to write more, but there is a 3 hour time limit that applies. I'll excuse the rule that it all has to be in one comment, because I do like reading continuations.

Thank you to all participants!