1st Place goes to LucyAnnWrites

2nd Place goes to keewriting

3rd Place goes to RuthRat

And the rest of the participants get a sticker.

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Judged by Anunimouse96

Perfectly Unexpected by MiniMoxx

Title 5/5
Cover 5/5
Blurb 3/5
Presentation 4/5
Opening chapter 8/10
Character development 6/10
Plot 12/20
Grammar 10/10
Vocabulary 9/10
Dialogues 9/10
Story development 8/10

Total 79/100

The Girl Who Was Afraid by LucyAnnWrites

Title 5/5
Cover 5/5
Blurb 5/5
Presentation 5/5
Opening chapter 8/10
Character development 8/10
Plot 17/20
Grammar 10/10
Vocabulary 10/10
Dialogues 10/10
Story development 6/10

Total 89/100

Love Knocks by keewriting

Title 4/5
Cover 5/5
Blurb 3/5
Presentation 5/5
Opening chapter 8/10
Character development 8/10
Plot 18/20
Grammar 10/10
Vocabulary 10/10
Dialogues 8/10
Story development 8/10

Total 86/100

Lust and Torture by IcyMoonSword

Title 5/5
Cover 3.5/5
Blurb 4/5
Presentation 3.5/5
Opening chapter 6/10
Character development 5/10
Plot 13/20
Grammar 7/10
Vocabulary 8/10
Dialogues 6/10
Story development 7/10

Total 68/100

The Clash of Rage and Revenge by thetinyimposter

Title 5/5
Cover 5/5
Blurb 4/5
Presentation 4/5
Opening chapter 8/10
Character development 5/10
Plot 8/20
Grammar 8/10
Vocabulary 8/10
Dialogues 10/10
Story development 7/10

Total 72/100

Silver by leena1310

Title 2.5/5
Cover 4/5
Blurb 3/5
Presentation 3/5
Character development 5/10
Plot 13/20
Grammar 7/10
Vocabulary 7/10
Dialogues 8/10
Story development 6/10

Total 58.5/100

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Judged by ericathedwarf

Amethyst Desire
TheVriter

Title 4.5/5
It’s distinct and pretty
Cover 4/5
I like it, but “amethyst” is hard to read
Blurb 4/5
Some grammar things but otherwise solid
Presentation 3.5/5

Opening chapter 6.5/10
Some grammar stuff in the first two paragraphs was king of distraction, transition out of the dream description was a little confusing to

Info heavy, lots of physical descriptions of characters and the soulmate rules
Plot 16.5/20
Man this sounds like it’s going to get complicated. We’ve got the hints of a love square at the beginning. Some good foundations though.
Grammar 7/10
Some issues (comma, sentence structure, etc)
Vocabulary 7/10

Dialogue 6.5/10

Character 7/10
Dove’s personality is shaping up there in the first chapter, not sure how I feel about her yet. I don’t understand why she thinks everyone hates her. There have been no indications of that. Maybe her parents freaking out when she was younger, but it seemed like that was stemming from their concern for her
Story Development 7/10
Things are moving along at a good pace

Total 73.5/100

Marlenne with double “N”
lilibouquet

Title 3.5/5
It feels like there’s a word missing, like with a double N
Cover 2.5/5
I like the concept but the words are hard to read and the turned folded over page doesn’t read right away and takes a bit to figure out what’s going on
Blurb 3.5/5
Grammar stuff, there’s some intrigue though
Presentation 3/5

Opening chapter 6/10
Opening sentence and paragraph were attention grabbing, but rest of the comments cover what was lacking in this chapter
Plot 8/20
There really isn’t a plot. Two girls recount their life stories up to this point and make statement with absolutes about the rest of their lives
Grammar 4/10
There are a lot of consistent issues here
Vocabulary 7/10
It’s fine, nothing jumping out in either direction
Dialogue 7/10
There isn’t much here to look at
Character 6/10
Pretty much everyone is terrible for no reason and the narrator is always being abused everywhere she goes. She just, she talks so intensely about some things and nonchalantly about other comparably traumatizing things. It’s confusing.

Also, who the heck is the chapter 2 narrator? Why does no one have names except Marlenne?
Story Development 6/10
Everything is delivered just from the narrator’s kind of stream of consciousness thoughts and recollections.the narrator tells us everything, there’s really nothing that we just get to see for ourselves

Total 56.5/100

My Best Partner
EmmaWrites1

Title 3/5

Cover 3.5/5

Blurb 1/5
Gives very little information to draw a potential reader in
Presentation 3/5

Opening chapter 5/10
The narrator's thoughts are very scattered at the beginning, we get a lot of his thoughts and not a lot of description (besides the woman’s outfit). Much more tell than show. I don’t like the generalizations about women he makes or that he says “females” but that could be a cultural thing.
Plot 8/20
I’m going to be honest. I really have no idea what’s happening. Here’s my best guess. Krish is a construction worker who hates working with women. He was expecting to go on a business meeting and meets Jahnvi, who is a woman, He slips up and calls her non-human because he’s nervous? Is he nervous because he gets nervous around women or because he doesn’t like working with women? She says she’s there on a blind date. He makes her confirm her location because obviously she’d be the incompetent one, but she’s in the right place. He calls his brother to confirm his location and finds out his mom set him up on a blind date, which is actually a marriage proposal. If the date goes well, they ge married. Jahnvi doesn’t want to get married because she wants to keep working. Krish is kinda into her but doesn’t want to admit it. Jahnvi tells Krish to call his mom and tell her that’s she arrogant and he doesn’t like her and the proposal is off. He calls her a savage as well and that upsets her. She leaves and Krish’s mom knows he’s lying because she’s met Jahnvi and knows she’s not arrogant. Jahnvi’s mother is upset the proposal didn’t work out because she wants her daughter to be married. Meera tells us that Jahnvi is not arrogant (which we’ve already been told by Krish’s mom). Krish meets his mom and someone’s mom on the way to a job/to the cafe to meet a friend. Someone’s mom asks him to pick up her daughter. Krish doesn’t remember her name or what she looks like, but apparently she was his best friend back in the day but he hasn’t met her (except we, the readers, have been told that he has, in fact, met her).
Grammar 6/10
Formatting with dialogue and paragraphs is very confusing. Seems likes there’s extra line breaks, reads like stanzas not prose. There are &s and a lot of ellipses. Lots of sentence structure stuff. Lots of uncapitalized names.
Vocabulary 5.5/10
Most of the words are within dialogue and not very descriptive or varied. I liked the Colgate smile thing though
Dialogue 4/10
It is difficult to know who’s speaking, dialogue often does not mimic natural speech patterns (this could be just the grammar issues getting in the way, some of the cadences seem right even if the sentence structure doesn’t), is exaggerated at times.

Too many names in dialogue.

Balance of prose to dialogue is off, an overwhelming amount of dialogue
Character 5/10
Why was Jahnvi mad that he called her a savage when she told him to say she was a terrible person? Maybe this is a cultural thing as well?

You shouldn’t have to tell us who she is, tell us how we think about her, tell us what she’s actually like, and tell us that she’s not like the way that we think about her. Let us figure all that out ourselves!
Story Development 4.5/10
When it switches settings/perspectives we are still getting someone’s thoughts in the narration. This is confusing. Also, they didn’t really change settings because most of it was contained within the phone call anyway. I think the shift was unnecessary.

I don’t like that it switches to Meera talking to us, the readers, directly. If you’re going to talk to the readers, it needs to be consistent, sparing, and either a third party narrator or the main character. There just isn’t an in-fiction reason for Meera to be talking to us and breaking the fourth wall so fully, like she acknowledges the book (upcoming chapters) and kind of acknowledges that it’s fiction (female lead).

I’m getting lost in all of the family members and their conversations and the perspective switch. The story can’t decide if it’s in first, second, or third. There aren’t enough dialogue tags to be able to keep up with who’s speaking. And, there is almost no description of setting or like who these people are that are talking besides their relationships to each other and some observations about the two main characters.
Total 48.5/100

Mystical Mutant
Kikibtsstan

Title 4/5
I like the alliteration, and it’s got some specificity
Cover 4/5
Really pretty, text is easy to read and pairs well with image
Blurb 4/5
Formatting is a little off with the paragraphs. Sets up one of those classic conflicts of nature vs technology. Gives a bit of the premise, the tone of the world, and some intrigue with the end questions.
Presentation 4.5/5
Cover, character collages, little baubles for page breaks
Opening chapter 6.5/10
The prologue moved a little too quickly for me, it was hard to keep up. Also Cinderblock did like a full 180 in his attitude and feelings about Violet for seemingly no reason. The world presented though seems interesting with its magic and forbidden woods. I’m hoping that the world is returned to at some point even though the story doesn’t take place there.
Plot 15/20
There’s a good bit here that doesn’t make sense to me. What happened to her mother? How does she know what a Salvin is? Is she the only one? Did her parents also turn into things during the full moon? ‘How did she afford a place at 15? Legally, how did that happen? If her race is so much smarter than humans, why did they destroy themselves when it could have been averted with a conversation? Based on the blurb it seems like Fiona’s main goal is to just live a normal life without anyone finding out she’s Salvin. If she’s managed it for this many years, what is going to change to make that harder? And if she’s the last one from her world, why introduce so many elements from that world in the prologue? I’m having a hard time seeing where this one’s going.
Grammar 6/10
Dialogue punctuation
Vocabulary 7/10
It’s fine, nothing stands out either way
Dialogue 6.5/10
Lots of grammar areas with the dialogue and everyone speaks very similarly
Character 7/10
Fiona does things that don’t make sense. She waits around until 7:30 to go and pick up vegetables and then struggles to get home before she turns, and then doesn’t even cook the vegetables. Like, she’s been dealing with this regularly her whole life. Why is she still making mistakes like that if she’s also supposed to be smarter than humans?
Story Development 6.5/10
Starts off very background heavy, both prologue and chp 1. Granted, prologue does have a good bit of action as well, it’s just very crunched. Things seems to jump around pretty quick. Fiona will do this or be places for just a few paragraphs before moving on. It’s hard to keep up at times.

Total 71/100

Anguish & Affection
RuthRat

Title 4.5/5
Reminds me of pride and prejudice. Got a nice ring to it, memorable
Cover 4/5
Pretty, fits the setting
Blurb 4/5
Tell us that it’s set in ancient rome without saying “set in ancient rome,” especially in the first line. Good overview of premise and introduction to characters, nice tie to title
Presentation 2.5/5
Nothing takes away from it
Opening chapter 8/10
Jumps right into some tension, has a good pace and escalation.
Plot 17.5/20
I can see where this is going and it fits the historical romance genre. There’s a couple of threads introduced that seem promising.
Grammar 7.5/10
Perspective switching (third and first) is unclear, some small things
Vocabulary 8/10
Nice variety
Dialogue 7.5/10
It’s fine, expressive at times
Character 8.5/10
The men are kind of extreme, but maybe that’s more historically accurate? Some of the things characters thought or said felt too modern/current.
Story Development 8/10
No structural indication when it switches to gaius’ view. Otherwise, good pacing, decent mix of internal thoughts and observations. Nice cliffhangers to keep you engaged

Total 80/100

U-Turn
Sharma_Drishti

Title 3.5/5
Kinda fun, hoping the book has to do with driving or turning around or something
Cover 3.5/5
Collage is kinda fun but the text is hard to read
Blurb 3/5
Typo in blurb. Give us the names in the blurb too, not just her and him. Give us something to make this one stand out from all the other romance books with similar base plots. Like use the synopsis in the introduction as your blurb instead
Presentation 4/5
Nice character collages
Opening chapter 7.5/10
This prologue is supposed to be a little mysterious as to who is talking in each set of dialogue, but maybe it’s just a tad too mysterious. It would be nice if there were some easter eggs left here to help decipher these people out later, like something they’re wearing or something in the room or some kind of speaking/gesture quirk that would identify them later. Otherwise I like it for a prologue
Plot 16/20
I think I see the vision of where this could be going. There are a lot of moving parts though and it’s hard to tell what is the main plot and what are the subplots, also I have no idea who the main character is, I want to say Kristi, but I’m not really sure.
Grammar 5.5/10
Sentence stuff, structure and missing words. Already some spelling discrepancies too
Vocabulary 7/10
Fine, nothing stood out either way
Dialogue 6.5/10
Dialogue tags are a little clumsy. Also very dialogue heavy.
Character 7/10
There are a lot of characters. I think this book is meant for someone who is already familiar with these actors and doesn’t need to learn their personalities/appearances/mannerisms because they already know them. The rest of us, however, do need some help differentiating and remembering who these people are and how they know each other.
Story Development 6/10
Okay normally I hate stuff like this where scenes repeat, but I think it’s working in this one, with the first few paragraphs from the prologue scene 1 being the first few paragraphs of chapter 1.

Chapter two switches to first person/second person with no indication of who’s talking.

Total 69.5/100

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A/N: Thanks ericathedwarf, for helping me judge the entries. Your help means a lot.

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