1st Place goes to RosesForDreaming

The Lightless Star (1# - The Lion and His Star Trilogy) by RosesForDreaming

Title 5/5
Cover 5/5
Blurb 5/5
Presentation 5/5
Opening chapter 10/10
Plot 20/20
Grammar 10/10
Vocabulary 10/10
Dialogues 10/10
Characters 10/10
Story development 10/10

Total 100/100

2nd Place goes to doodooferguson

A Tainted Story by doodooferguson

Title 5/5
Cover 4/5
Blurb 5/5
Presentation 5/5
Opening chapter 10/10
Plot 20/20
Grammar 10/10
Vocabulary 10/10
Dialogues 10/10
Characters 9/10
Story development 10/10

Total 98/100

3rd Place goes to scrabblepost

The Mortal God by scrabblepost

Title 5/5
Cover 5/5
Blurb 5/5
Presentation 5/5
Opening chapter 8/10
Plot 18/20
Grammar 10/10
Vocabulary 10/10
Dialogues 9/10
Characters 10/10
Story development 9/10

Total 94/100

And for the other participants:

A Realm of Magic and Mayhem by AdrielleReina

Title 5/5
Cover 5/5
Blurb 5/5
Presentation 5/5
Opening chapter 8/10
Character development 9/10
Plot 17/20
Grammar 10/10
Vocabulary 9/10
Dialogues 8/10
Story development 8/10

Total 89/100

Wolf and Keeper by The SquareCheese

Title 5/5
Cover 5/5
Blurb 5/5
Presentation 5/5
Opening chapter 8/10
Character development 7/10
Plot 14/20
Grammar 10/10
Vocabulary 9/10
Dialogues 8/10
Story development 8/10

Total 89/100

Delicacy Devourer by Summer_SKY_9

Title 5/5
Cover 5/5
Blurb 5/5
Presentation 5/5
Opening chapter 7/10
Character development 7/10
Plot 14/20
Grammar 10/10
Vocabulary 9/10
Dialogues 8/10
Story development 6/10

Total 87/100

The Black Dress by BeingYourseelf

Title 5/5
Cover 4/5
Blurb 3/5
Presentation 2/5
Opening chapter 5/10
Plot 3/20
Grammar 6/10
Vocabulary 7/10
Dialogues 5/10
Characters 7/10
Story development 2.5/10

Total 45.5/100

Lost by Vizzy96

Title 5/5
Cover 5/5
Blurb 4/5
Presentation 4/5
Opening chapter 8/10
Plot 14/20
Grammar 6/10
Vocabulary 7/10
Dialogues 7/10
Characters 8/10
Story development 8/10

Total 76/100

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Judged by BreezyMulligan

Devil's heart by Donaaloy

Title 3/5
Cover 4/5
Blurb 4/5
Presentation 4/5
Opening chapter 6/10
Plot 17/20
Grammar 5/10
Vocabulary 8/10
Dialogues 7/10
Characters 8/10
Story development 7/10

Total 73/100

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Judged by Eysian_Aon

Blessed Curse - VictoriaLachac
(Read 5 Chapters)

Title 3/5
    Doesn’t make much sense how a curse can be blessed. This makes it intriguing, though flawed. Additionally, it doesn’t roll off of the tongue very well.

Cover 5/5
    Looks professional- I’d expect to see it on the cover of a YA novel in a bookstore.

Blurb 4/5
    Very good- hooking and gives a gist of the themes of the story. However, I have a small qualm with not getting a general idea of what the “problem” mentioned in the blurb actually is. It leaves me not knowing what the overall “quest” will be about.

Presentation 5/5
    Nothing out of the ordinary here. The “Introduction” was very nice.

Opening Chapter 7/10
    It felt like there was a lot of content crammed into it without giving time enough for the reader to understand the shift in setting/activities. We go from healing a child, to speaking with her mother, into a violent attack and then conversation with her father very quickly. Lots of events aren’t bad, but the reader needs time to transition.

Plot 15/20
    The plot is very slow to pick up, but also happens very rapidly once it does. There is little pause between events in chapters. That said, all the events are good and serve a purpose in setting up the story. For example, the introduction of our two main characters to one another, and the introduction of the “inquisitor” as I’ll call him, who is suspicious of Valentina. I took points off because even at chapter 5, I’m not sure where the story is going, so it’s mostly character driven. If you don’t like the characters, then there’s no reason to keep going.

Grammar 9/10
    Small mistakes here and there- nothing serious. Chapters 1 and 2 were perfect in this regard.

Vocabulary 8/10
    Decent usage of vocabulary. There are some new, more cultured words that I’ve never seen myself before, which lends some credit to the time period and cultural background of the story. That said, some words and phrases used are a little repetitive, being repeated multiple times per chapter.

Dialogues 6/10
    In chapter one, as an example, when the child speaks (allegedly six years old) she does not give off a childish feel, instead sounding very mature and adult-like. Making sure you capture the tone of every character through how they speak is very important, but not always achieved here.

Characters 8/10
    While there isn’t a big difference in the way they speak internally, our main characters are unique in how they present themselves to the reader. Particularly in what they are doing when the reader first meets them in chapters one and two respectively. The side characters (parents) however, are very flat and both characters essentially have the same set of parents.

Story Development 6/10
    The story is very slow to develop. It doesn’t have any critical, advancing action from our main characters until chapter 3, when Valentina fights the aggressors for Sandro. After that, the only other “advancements” are the mysterious man and the marriage proposal for Sandro. I don’t feel like the plot has been set in motion, but is still being set up. That feels very slow.

Total 76/100

BONUS:
Which Chapters have the funniest Dialogue?
Chapter 2, between Sandro and the woman he’s dumping.

How well written is Isabella as a Side Character?
    Her introduction makes her an immediately interesting and likable character. She is entertaining for the portion that I read up to (Chapter 5) but a little flat so far. I imagine that changes later in the story, but as it is now she’s only a subversion of a nun’s typical personality.

Fire & Ice - thxrsdaychild
(Read 4 Chapters)

Title 2/5
    Very generic. When searching for the book I found at least 20-30 others with the same name, and I didn’t look through all the search results.

Cover 3/5
    Pretty good. The effects aren’t the best but it’s still nice to look at. Not a fan of the spread out sticker placements.

Blurb 4/5
    Fairly good. The first paragraph gives us the overall theme, and the following two give us more detail on the character himself. Confused by the statement “a chaos.”

Presentation 5/5
    I quite like the inclusion of the aesthetic collages in the authors note.

Opening Chapter 7/10
    It’s interesting right off the bat because you wonder why he’s sneaking into his own estate, but it gets a little cluttered with the introduction of all the character names so quickly with very little description as to who they all are.

Plot 18/20
    The plot is so far, somewhat generic in the department of a missing person, but redeems itself with the inheritance of his uncle's estate and job. I am compelled to read more just to see how the adventure of finding the missing woman and balancing his new responsibilities at the same time goes.

Grammar 10/10
    Immaculate writing in this department.

Vocabulary 9/10
    Nothing special, but well used and varied so it gives us vivid imagery.

Characters 7/10
    I quite enjoy the representation of the characters. The internal fears we get from Cuthbert, and the shifting appearance of Madam Wulf from neat to disheveled. That said, I don’t feel like we get much introduction to them outside of them just showing up (Solan, for example) which makes things confusing.

Dialogue 10/10
    I quite like the dialogue. It feels natural and is varied from person to person in regards to tone, making them all sound like individuals rather than just vessels for the story to move along.

Story Development 8/10
    The story picks up right away, developing very quickly. It almost gives you whiplash.

Total 83/100

The Last Philosopher - NickfEast
(Read 6 Chapters)

Title 5/5
I quite like this title. Very unique- there's nothing else like it on Wattpad.

Cover 3/5
Good design, but a little grainy.

Blurb 5/5
Beautifully written. Brings about lots of intrigue.

Presentation 4/5
I like that there's a narrated option plugged into the book's blurb, and I also really enjoy the quotes at the beginning of the chapters. That said, I don't like how the quotes are separate from the chapters (on a whole different page) rather than just at the top of the chapter.

Opening Chapter 10/10
    I was impressed by this opening chapter. It seems to juggle so many elements with ease, from the humor in the descriptions, to the profoundness of the topics at hand. While it doesn’t set in motion a traditional plot line with traditional “human” characters, it does set up the events to come. This made me excited to read more.

Plot 15/20
    I’d say the plot doesn’t begin moving until Herschel's chapters, while the previous chapters with Lyearsrakardsul deal more with world building and character development. Additionally, as Herschel’s escape is fairly unhindered, I’d say that the plot is somewhat lacking in place of character development.

Grammar 10/10
    I haven’t noticed any mistakes in the chapters I’ve read. Well done.

Vocabulary 7/10
    The vocabulary in terms of usage and variety are good. No mistakes that I noticed. That said, the usage of so many “made up” words can make things a bit confusing, and makes a high barrier of entry for new readers. This would be alleviated on second reading, but initially it’s very hard to get the hang of everything that’s being referred to.

Characters 9/10
    I find the characters to be interesting and dimensional. Very well rounded, and with different styles of internal monologue to set them apart in tone.

Dialogue 10/10
    I can’t say there was any true dialogue in the chapters I read so much as there was internal monologue. That being said, I enjoyed every bit of it. They were diverse, making it easy to tell whose head you were in even without the naming of the character. It felt like a genuine stream of consciousness filled with the thoughts of a real person.

Story Development 6/10
    In the six chapters I read, not much happened in the way of development outside of Herschel's escape. Character and world development was rich and plentiful, but few events actually happened in that span of time.

Total 84/100

Dioxazine - Sir Saint
(read 4 Chapters)

Title 5/5
    Very Unique. Easy to find in a crowd.

Cover 3/5
    Leaves something to be desired. You can barely see the author's name on the book due to the font color, and the white side bars that run the length of the cover are just an odd choice. Also, funnily enough, the color on the cover isn’t Dioxazine Violet.

Blurb 2/5
    There’s a typo, and the blurb feels like it’s afraid to unabashedly use the book's terminology. It introduces some world building, but not the overall driving force, or even a character.

Presentation 3/5   
    Overall useful, but a little long winded and in some places, unprofessional. I think most people can appreciate the clear cut list of potentially graphic content that will be in the book. The chapter headings themselves are very pretty. However, the recaps that are stated to be at the top of each chapter just don’t exist so that shouldn’t be presented as a feature to readers.

Opening Chapter 6/10
    This chapter felt like an odd introduction to the (presumably) main character. We didn’t learn much about them, aside from their lust for torture. It also didn’t noticeably advance a plot outside of bringing the character into the world (which is a process we didn’t get to see). It was also very wordy on the descriptions.

Plot 12/20
    There are some confusing parts, such as why S was wounded when being found by the hunters when they were fine in the previous scene. Additionally, how Nixa found wounds on S when she was expressly forbidden from removing any clothing. Why the roommates didn’t question why the two didn’t have clothes, or money. Overall it’s just very messy and full of things that aren’t obvious nor explained.

Grammar 6/10
    Some mistakes here and there. Not terrible, but I noticed at least 2-3 per chapter.

Vocabulary 7/10
    There is a wide variety of vocabulary used, though some of it was used seemingly incorrectly. Additionally, I think it was used too often, making things wordy.

Characters 9/10
    The characters and their descriptions are diverse and very neatly done. Nixa and her roommates dynamic in particular is very fun and shows off the characters nicely.

Dialogue 7/10
    The dialogue is hit or miss. I find myself more attracted to the conversations between Nixa and her roommate(s?), as they come off as more natural, whereas the conversations between the main character and the butler are stilted. Sometimes it’s also difficult to tell who is talking.

Story Development 9/10
    The premise is set up fairly quickly with the undercover aspect of demons hiding with demon hunters, which is something I can appreciate. Gets right to the point. Then it takes a bit of a detour to further develop characters.

Total 69/100

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Thanks for taking your time in helping to contribute to the awards, BreezyMulligan & Elysian_Aon!

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