『 @death_loves_forever 』

✰ cover
I like that the cover has something to do with the story, however, because it has more of a fantasy/romance aspect to it, I feel like something that had something to do more with those elements would suit it better.

✰ title
It's always interesting to read stories with a "royalty" element to them. I think your title captures that really well.

✰ blurb
The blurb is good, but I think you should add just a little more to it—like what is the story's conflict?

✰ characters
Rovilla seems like a strong-willed character. It's no surprise that she was reincarnated into the body of a CEO. It suits her because she had already been a person in power.

Octavia is someone I'm a bit more curious to know about. She was a spy for the enemy, so I wonder how she was caught.

✰ plot
The plot reminds me a lot of those manhwa stories, I'm not sure if you've heard of them, but they're typically about how the main characters die and they're reincarnated into a new world. However, I feel like this story did the opposite of what typical manhwa's do—instead of dying in the modern-day and being reincarnated in a world full of kings and queens, it's the queen who dies and is reincarnated in the modern-day. It's super interesting to see how you've taken this and flipped it around.

✰ pacing
The pacing is a bit fast, but there's nothing wrong with that. I like that we get both sides of the story told from both characters. I do wonder how reincarnation of this world works, though. Like if they were reincarnated, wouldn't the story have started with the characters being much younger? Or does it not matter what age they are and once you're reincarnated you have all the memories of the current body you reside in?

✰ grammar/language
There were quite a few mistakes I spotted as I read through your story. I did point them out, you were mainly missing articles—words like "the," "an," and "a." Make sure you double-check each chapter before publishing them.

I also saw that you occasionally mix past and present tense. Try to avoid doing this as it may confuse readers. Remember that if you're going to be writing a novel in the past tense, you use words like would, could, did, was, etc. Avoid using words like is, am, do, will, etc. because those are in the present tense (unless you're writing your story in the present tense, then you can use those). I like that you put the flashbacks in italics, that's something that works really well.

I wanted to point out that you forgot to add questions marks at the end of each question in this paragraph:

Just be mindful of that going forward.

✰ overall thoughts
Overall, I think the idea for this story is brilliant, but fixing those mistakes will help out tremendously. Sorry if this review didn't make much sense, I'm a bit sleep-deprived lol. I wish you all the best in your writing endeavors!

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Happy writing!