『 @DragonsDreaming 』

✰ cover
I think the cover is nice. I especially like that you replaced the 'i' in Pursuit with a rose!

✰ title
The title is unique in the sense that you most often see titles that go: In Pursuit Of "insert something here," while your title cuts off at Of. It's all that's really needed when you understand what the story is about.

✰ blurb
The blurb itself is precise and to the point. There are a few errors within it, however. I think you meant to write "spend" not "spent" in the first sentence. And the last sentence could be written as:

A summer road trip filled with room service, safe houses, and a couple of close calls was one thing, but falling for the agent assigned to protect her? That's guaranteed to complicate things.

I, personally, think it flows better than just having the sentence end at "one thing," and then continue with "but." Just a suggestion!

✰ characters
On first impression, Henley seems like a very intelligent and observant character. When she was kidnapped she didn't panic or go into hysterics, instead, she tried to pick apart the conversation the men were having about her. I also think she's very humanized in the sense that when she's being taught how to fire a gun, she realizes that she might not be able to shoot at an actual person.

For me, Nick is still a puzzle waiting to be solved. I know bits and pieces about him, but not a lot. I'm sure his character is fleshed out as the novel progresses.

At times I felt like Henley was a bit harsh with Nick at the start of their road trip. She kept pushing him to talk to her when he told her he wasn't that great at starting up conversations. Now I understand that she finds it difficult not being able to talk to someone, but I feel like she could have approached the situation in a better manner. However, their relationship grows as time goes on and really enjoyed seeing that.

✰ plot
The plot is great! It reads as though it's straight from a movie. The plotline of Henley's father who works for the government as a scientist and the reason she was kidnapped was that they want him to build biochemical weapons is very interesting.

Also, as a side note, the plot kind of reminds me of the Disney Channel movie Princess Protection Program lol.

✰ pacing
I thought the pacing was alright. There were some scenes that I felt dragged for a bit but it wasn't too bad.

✰ grammar/language
There were a few spelling errors scattered throughout the chapters that I read. Going back and re-reading those chapters should help with catching those mistakes! It wasn't anything major, just needs some editing.

✰ overall thoughts
Overall, I actually really enjoyed reading this story! I like how you've fleshed out Henley's and Nick's relationship as they continue their road trip together. I left off on a cliffhanger so I might have to continue reading just to see what happens to Henley! Great work (:

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Happy writing!