『 @xxsoteria 』

✰ cover
Beautiful cover! Kind of eerie but also interesting—makes me wonder what happened to the woman on the cover.

✰ title
Lovely title, very unique!

✰ blurb
There's a lot to unpack in the blurb. The first paragraph really hooks you in. Was she actually sealed away, or was it a metaphor? That second paragraph was fantastic. It made me want to know what were the misdeeds that she did? The blurb was overall really great—it left a mystery for me to read into further!

✰ characters
Cannaria seems very hotheaded! But what would you expect from a goddess fo war? She is very much her own person—doesn't take orders from anyone. I really like that about her! She also seems to have a very abrasive personality, especially towards those around her. Like her sister, she was slut shaming her which I didn't approve of but I guess I could understand her anger.

✰ plot
I've read a lot of manhwa myself so I was pretty used to the set up you had written! However, I'm assuming that the beginning of the first chapter was her seeing her past? And then once she woke up she was a mortal child with a new family? Or is she the same person with the same family but just mortal? Sorry, I just got confused for a bit at the beginning and just wanted to make sure.

I think the plot is very interesting and unique but stays on the path of what you would typically read in a manhwa and I'm all for it!

✰ pacing
I thought the overall pacing was fine. It was just the first chapter where I got a bit confused but everything else flowed smoothly!

✰ grammar/language
I understand that English is not your first language but I still think you did a very good job at writing it. There were very minor issues while I was reading but nothing too big. Just to help out a bit, I saw this line in the prologue:

A weapon that was given to us by Father to stop each other but it was also forbidden to use it.

Could be rewritten as:

A weapon given to us by our Father that was meant to stop one another, but was also forbidden to use.

Just a suggestion!

You also tend to use present tense and past tense similarly—try to just stick to one because it will end up confusing the reader.

I really liked this line though:

A person needs strength as much as they need intelligence...

It was very unique to have made the sisters twin goddesses! One of war and knowledge—brilliant!

✰ overall thoughts
Overall, I think you have a very interesting story! It just needs a bit of editing here and there but other than that, your work is great! I hope you continue writing this story ♡

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Happy writing!