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✰ cover
I actually think the cover looks great! It matches really well with the story, however, I wish you would have put the title onto the cover itself. Try using apps such as Canva--it's easy to use and is supported by Wattpad!

✰ title
The title made me intrigued. I wondered whether if this story would be like a Romeo and Juliet situation.

✰ blurb
The blurb is really short. I would suggest you extend it more, that way the reader knows what they're going into. Like the first sentence doesn't tell us much.

Stella is a simple girl with a birthmark.

Well, Stella might be a simple girl, but what about her birthmark makes her different? Explain what shape the birthmark is. Sometimes we need those small details within the blurb.

✰ characters
I was a bit confused with Stella. She continually stated that she didn't know anything about wolves, yet she kept calling Blake her mate? So does she know she's a wolf or not? Also, how does she know about wolf speed if she's never been taught anything about wolves? I think I'm just being nit-picky but I wanted to point those details out.

Blake seems like he has potential as a character. I didn't see much of him, other than when he was falling for Stella, but that's pretty much it.

Jess seems to not be a very good friend. Yes, she helped Stella with her outfit in the first chapter, but she was so quick to side with her boyfriend rather than her friend.

✰ plot
I think the premise of the story is actually really cool! I like the idea of Stella being this sort of "chosen one" type of character--being marked to end all wolves. I hope to see this further developed!

✰ pacing
I thought the pacing was fine. From what I read, Stella and Blake seem to be taking their relationship slow. Although there is a definite attraction for one another, I do like that instead of having them rush being together, they take the time to establish their relationship first.

✰ grammar/language
There were quite a lot of typos that I found throughout the chapters that I read. Going back and re-reading should help catch those mistakes!

I have a little bit of advice as you continue in your writing endeavors: you don't always have to end dialogue with "this person said." It gets too repetitive and muddles the flow of the story. You can occasionally leave out "said" because readers don't always need to know who said what. Especially if it's just two people talking. For instance:

"I am not wearing this." Stella sighed and Jess scowled at her.

"Yes, you are. Here," Jess said as she walked over to her, pulling Stella's hair out of her bun. Stella's hair fell over her shoulders in long, curly blonde locks.

Stella grabbed her jacket from her closet... "I'm at least bringing this."

"Fine. Let's go then!"

Jess grabbed Stella's arm...

Hopefully, you can see my point? It's not necessary to repeat who says what all the time.

Also, I caught a few instances where you mixed past and present tense. Try to refrain from doing that as it tends to confuse readers. I'm assuming that you want your story to be told in past tense--as almost the whole thing is told in past tense--so try writing this sentence:

It makes him worry if she's ok.

Like this:

It made him worry if she was ok.

Or if it's being said in his head, just italicize it.

✰ overall thoughts
Overall, I like the idea you have for this story, but there is a lot that needs to be worked on. But that's alright! It takes time for us to strengthen our skills at something--as is with anything we do--so don't feel discouraged! Keep at it. I'm eager to learn about what happens with Stella and Blake!

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Happy writing!