『 @s00gifted 』

✰ cover
The photo of the cover is very beautiful. I'm assuming the girl is the main character because of the scarlet hair.

✰ title
The title is very interesting, although, I'm not entirely sure what it's supposed to signify. However, I think it has something to do with the pills Mia found at the start of the story.

✰ blurb
The structure of the blurb is very unique and could potentially hook readers in. I would just suggest adding a bit more details within the blurb because that's what it's for--it's a synopsis of what your story will be about, who your characters are, and what the main conflict will be.

✰ characters
Mia's luck seems to be pretty lousy. She just can't catch a break. First, her mom dies then her dad and no one seems to care about that or her. I liked how she fought back when the boys mistreated her, for a split second, I thought she wasn't going to do something about Harry's sexual harassment but I was glad she did. If someone did that to me, I would've done the same thing--not caring whether if I'd get fired or not.

✰ plot
The plot wasn't fully developed by the time I reached chapter five, I'm assuming that the plot picks up in upcoming chapters. So far we everything has just been set up for what's to come. I found it pretty intriguing how Mia doesn't know much about who her dad truly was.

✰ pacing
The pacing is pretty good. I like the length of each chapter because they're not too short nor too long and that's perfect for Wattpad readers.

✰ grammar/language
I just have a few suggestions as you continue writing:

Try to add the translations of the sentences in Portuguese somewhere within the chapter. I recommend you do this with all languages because, in that first chapter, I didn't quite understand what Mia and her dad were saying.

I saw a few instances where you mixed past and present tense. Try to avoid this as it could confuse readers. Remember that words like was, would, did, had, etc. are all in the past tense, while will, is, can, etc. are in the present tense.

✰ overall thoughts
Overall, I think you have a very solid story. Going back to fix those small things will help enhance your story! I hope this was helpful. Let me know if you have any questions. Good luck in all your writing endeavors!

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Happy writing!