CalypsoClover did this, and I feel like doing it too

So I'm reacting to a freaking book called The dangerous cat, which I made on like, my third day of wattpad

First off, what is that title

The dangerous cat

Yea

No

Anyway, here is the prologue

Stormkit squirmed and tried to open her eyes. She heard her mother Fawnstep mew to Flamenose. "Stop boasting about your kits Flamenose!" Stormkit wanted to see them. Again she tried. But her eyes didn't give. With a frustrated sigh she slumped into her bedding. "Stormkit?" Asked Fawnstep.
First of all, Flamenose is a freaking canon nameeee

Flamenose snorted. "You gonna get up?" She growled. Stormkit couldn't see her mothers eyes but she could hear the hostility in her tone. "Shut up you load of mouse dung!" Snapped Fawnstep.
Ooh! Mama got sass

Digging her claws hard into the bracken, she managed to open her eyes. "Told you Flamenose!" Snapped Fawnstep. Flamenose whisked her tail against the ground crossly. Flamenose was a larger she-cat then Stormkit expected. And her fur was a brilliant ginger.
Told you? And I thought this Nest was made of moss, not bracken ✂️ And where are your manners Stormkit? A BIGGER SHE CAT?! Are you calling her fat?

Her mother on the other paw, was quite small. Her tan fur making her look like a deer. "Mama can I go outside?" She asked. Fawnstep whisked her claws against Stormkit's ear crossly. "Wait for Poolkit and Mousekit!" She hissed.
Dayng, why did I make her such a Mary Sue

Stormkit winced. She expected her mother to be kinder to her, especially when she just opened her eyes. Fury and hatred burned in her mothers eyes, so strong that Stormkit had to take a step back.
Because newborns can recognize hatred and fury

Stormkit still felt pain on her ear. She licked it and drew back. Then Fawnstep gave a purr of delight. "Poolkit opened her eyes!" She purred. Stormkit flicked her tail crossly. Her mother didn't seem so excited when she opened her eyes. Stormkit looked to Poolkit.
Wait a second. I thought Stormkit was a runt

Poolkit had green eyes and a white and gray pelt. She ran over to Stormkit. "Let's go outside!" She squeaked. Stormkit yowled her agreement, she flung herself for the entrance.
Because Stormkit is suddenly joyful, and newborn kits can RUN LIKE MANIACS

"What in StarClans name are you doing!" Fawnstep snapped. She flicked a claw against Stormkit's face. Stormkit felt the hot feeling of blood, and smelled it too. "We want to go outside." Said Poolkit indignantly. Fawnstep flicked her tail. "Wait for Mousekit!" She snapped. Poolkit flopped down. Stormkit lay down next to her. Falling into a sweet sleep.
Because after your mother freaking kills you you can have a good sleep
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A paw prodded Stormkit. "Wha...?" She mewed. She looked up to see Poolkit. "Mousekit opened his eyes, we can go out!" She yowled quietly. Stormkit quickly got up, shaking her pelt out and looked over to see Mousekit stretching lazily. He turned around, his eyes were a hazel color. She turned around and saw Poolkit. She beckoned with her tail, leading Stormkit  to the entrance.
Ok, if I divided the paragraph and added more detail, this could be been better

She followed Poolkit and Mousekit out.
Outside was nothing like the nursery. Their were too many sounds, and scents and cats to take in.
My stupid spelling

"Hey! Over here!" Stormkit turned around and saw a black and silver tom padding over. "Who's he?" Stormkit whispered. "Hello, Poolkit, Mousekit and Stormkit!" He called. When he saw their confused faces he added; "I'm your father Frostedsoul!" Poolkit raised her tail up. "Are you sure?" She sniffed. Frostedsoul sighed. "If I wasn't would I tell you I was?" He growled. Now Poolkit didn't look so sure.
Dad logic

Mousekit poked her. "What was that for!" She snapped. He rolled his eyes. "You lazy old furball! You must be mad!" She jabbed her paws at his nose. "Am I really!" She laughed. Stormkit flexed her claws, tempted to join in on the fun. "Can I play too?" She asked. They stopped play-fighting. "No." Said Mousekit, his fur ruffled. Stormkit fluffed out her black pelt.
Because 2 second old kits are lazy old fur balls. It's also nice that we found that her littermates hate her

"Fine! I'll find an apprentice to play with!" She growled. She stomped away to find an apprentice. A small she-cat came running by. "Hello Stormkit!" she called. Confused Stormkit crouched for a moment, not sure what to do, then she got up to go back to searching.
Bc u just want to crouch when your confused

It was hard to cover much ground with stubby kit-legs. She heard a mew behind her. "Hey! Are you Stormkit!"
Yes, who are you

Stormkit turned around, opening her jaws to reply. "Yes and who might you-" she was stopped short by the speakers appearance. He was a long limbed dark tabby tom. "So you are Stormkit!" He exclaimed. "Oops! Forgot to say my name!" He licked his chest fur embarrassed. "I'm Brokenpaw!" Stormkit hesitated.
I want to name my kid Brokenpaw

"Well what do you want?" She said finally. He gave her a smile. "You looked kinda sad." He said. "I wanted to know why." She licked her paw and drew it over her ear. "Nothing's wrong." She mumbled, looking away.
Brokenpaw looked worried. "Well, if your sure..." She flicked her tail crossly. "I'm fine, honestly." She said sympathy creeping into her voice. "Okay... But do you wanna play warriors?" He asked.
"Sure." Stormkit answered.
I stopped reading

"Ok! I'm Brokenstar!" Stormkit flicked her ears. "Ok!" She agreed. "I'm Stormcloud the deputy!" She waved her tail happily. "We need more cats." He commented. Stormkit nodded. "How about your sister and brother?" Brokenpaw suggested. Poolkit and Mousekit! You would think he's mouse-brained! Stormkit thought.
Stormcloud, Brokenstar?

"Fine..." She agreed. "Poolkit! Mousekit!" Yowled Stormkit. They scampered over. "What?" Poolkit snapped. "Will you play Warriors with us?" Asked Brokenpaw. Poolkit's eyes widened, and they glimmered happily. "Of course!" She mewed. Mousekit nodded too.
Hue hue mouse dung

"Ok!" Brokenpaw leaped upon a stump.
"All cats old enough to catch their own prey gather here beneath bigstump for a clan meeting!" Bigstump! Stormkit thought amused. All of them gathered next to him. "Poolpaw! Come forward!" He yowled. Poolkit came forward. "From now on you will be called Poolstep!" They touched noses. "Mousepaw!" Mousekit too, stepped forth. "From now on you will be called Mousewing!" Stormkit rolled her eyes as she called out their 'names.'
I am terrified

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"SunClan attack!" Some cat screeched. At instant every cat in the nursery was up, fur bristling. Poolkit pushed Fawnstep. "Mama!" She squealed. Fawnstep looked at them. "Hold on! I'm going to take one of you at a time!" She snatched up Stormkit. She raced out, past the battling cats. They seemed to be running forever, till Fawnstep came to a stop. "Climb up that tree!" She urged. Stormkit took a flying leap, and clawed her way up the tree. "Don't move!" Fawnstep hissed. Then a cat stepped out of the shadows.
SunClan. Really? And how in StarClan's name did they get out of the camp in one word

"Swanfeather!" Fawnstep hissed at the black and white cat. Swanfeather smiled. "You remember me, uh! Who is this! I may have forgot! Oh wait!" She smiled wickedly. "I remember you! Your the cat whose father killed my mother!" Fawnstep gasped. "Is that why your here Swanfeather?!" She growled. Swanfeathers claws slid out.
Swamfeather is the only cat who seems developed

"No!" Yowled Stormkit, but Swanfeathers paw lifted and it hit Fawnsteps throat. Stormkit choked with grief. Swanfeather stood rigid and shocked. Instead of triumph in her eyes, Stormkit saw deep regret.
How?

"I'm so sorry!"
I'm not

I will be rewriting this

It made me gag