Reviewer: AnnQueen5

Cover: Decent, could be better

Review: I really think the concept of the book is good, but to be honest, I was very confused about where the book was going with the story. It kind of all jumbled up, and it didn't really make much sense. Starting with a fight over a boy isn't always a good idea, as it will confuse the readers as to why it happened, unless you are doing a Before and After type of thing. Overall, pretty good, but the plot is quite flawed.

Suggestions: The classic grammar and translation errors, so I suggest fixing those. The one big thing I suggest is to give the characters more background context. No matter if this is fanfiction, you should give some background context to them. Just some key things, how they look, what they value, things like that. I also suggest building the story up first. It seems like you started with the climax and built from there. Start with a building up of setting and placement of characters and go from there.

Rating: 3 out of 5 stars