By Starflower1206

Completed: no
Length: 6 parts (only 3 real chapters though)

Synopsis (taken from description):

First impression based on reading the description?

It's a mouthful to read and the grammar isn't very correct so it makes it hard to follow. Also, the description is pretty much a play by play of the entire book, leaving almost nothing as a surprise. My advice: definitely look at this description. It is the first thing your potential readers are gonna see. Just needs a little work. I don't know much about the show you're writing about but that doesn't mean I can't read and follow along because the story is pretty good so far 👍

Cover graphic?

Lmao because I made it I'm not gonna say much about it even though I think it's cool. I'm not one to brag I don't normally do that.

How did it flow? Were there any errors? Major mistakes?

I read all of it and only found a few minor errors that could be fixed by re reading the chapters once more and just fixing the minor stuff like tenses and sentence structure. No biggie there.

(Taken from the story)
The excerpt above can get a little confusing. It takes a little effort to figure out who's saying what in a lot of the story because of the spacing. This happens many times and just needs to be tweaked a little bit.

(It's also here too, just to show it happens more than once)

What about the characters?

Once again, I'm not familiar with the show so I can't really say how accurately the are portrayed but I can judge the development and introductions. *spoilers sort of* when the girls are introduced they are very well described to their looks but their personalities are sort of questionable. So that's just one thing. And Muir's appearance is unknown but that's probably because he's a character in the show and you expect readers to know him. 🤔

Originality of the plot?

It's really interesting actually and I'm going to be reading along even though I haven't see the show yet. Great story and it's very interesting!

Overall rating?

Four moons - 🌙🌙🌙🌙