In first place is... TammiCharles
I loved it, honestly. The fact that the person who injected her was the poisoned person's sister - genius. A few grammatical and spelling errors that you need to look out for next time and you could maybe elaborate on things - tell us all about her emotions and so on. Your character seems very happy and jovial - which I love. On the whole, it was amazing!!! Well done and keep the good work up for the next task.

In second place is... nivz92
Well done!!! I loved the way you wrote it and I very much appreciate that you stuck to the story line. I laughed at the part when the horse turned into Danajay. Lol. But try not to rush everything. She was very quick to believe everything he said and, in real life (yes, I know that this is nothing like real life...) no one trusts people that easily. Just take it slow. Also, maybe elaborate on things a bit more. Keep up the awesome work!!!

In third place is... Fallen_God15
I was captivated by your beautiful writing...but I thought Gracie was supposed to be your compulsion-ee and Cobian was supposed to be your poisoned person? Could you put it in a different book so I don't get confused with things you don't want me to count as your entry. Also, there were some minor spelling and grammatical mistakes so look out for them. Have fun with the next task.

In fourth place is... FlyOverSky
Great back story! I feel so sad for your character and now she has to save the very person who killed her parents. Noooooo! Elaborate on things as well...I need more detail. Also, check your grammar and spelling too.

In fifth place is... icypenguin17
Aaaaagh! I am never having school jabs ever again!!!!! Lol anyway, this was great! Well done. Please elaborate on things because I want to know more!!!!!

In sixth place is... kms162002
Great writing. I loved the air of mystery about it. Could you put it is a separate book please because there will be other tasks. Other than that, spelling, grammar, elaboration are really important to swing yourself up to the top. Enjoy the next task!

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