25: Ten things you could improve

The Dark Bloods

1.       Bulk up—no pun intended—Dante’s character

2.       Define Reyna and Mundus’ relationship a bit more

3.       Build up on Ram and his backstory a little more

4.       Take out a lot of fluff stuff, mostly from ID

5.       Typos…>___>

6.       Not be so wordy in sentences

7.       Give ID chapters proper POVs

8.       Clean up details involving Magika and other plot aspects, mostly from ID

9.       Expand on some opening details in AoaD

10.     Determine if prologues are proper prologues

Calathus

1.       Make the first chapter a proper first chapter…

2.       Have more Tiel time to show he was a good friend of Sianna

3.       Add more emotion to the chapter where he dies

4.       Tone down Reth’s adorableness…?

5.       Typos…>___>

6.       Not use such overly “polite” dialogue with everyone

7.       Establish Iari’s damn accent/style of speaking

8.       Plan out chapters better >.<

9.     Add a few more details to the opening chapters so their level of content matches the current ones

10.   Write down the names of places/people/etc. when I first give it to them instead of scrolling around the chapters trying to find it!