🔪》Title, Cover, & Blurb

The title is capitalized correctly and fits the story, however, it doesn't really attract readers to the story. The cover is boring and doesn't attract readers to the story. The image on the cover is hard to see. Is it wings? The blurb introduces the story and the characters well, however, I think it could flow better.

🔪》Plot

The plot of the story is interesting and I am wondering why Veronica and Thomas are doing these experiments. The exposition introduces the characters well, however, the world could be introduced better. The plot seems to be progressing quickly though. Kaitlyn has already gained Veronica's trust. Kaitlyn also asked for a lot of things right off the bat and Veronica gave in. I think it'd be better if she starts with one thing to see if Veronica will give it to her. Then once Kaitlyn sees she can get perks if she continues to cooperate have her slowly ask for more. Having Kaitlyn ask pretty much all at once and Veronica agreeing takes away from the power Veronica seems to hold over the kids and it doesn't fit with her character.

🔪》Characters

Some of the characters are introduced and described more than others. What do Veronica and Thomas look like? The characters' personalities are shown well throughout the chapters. The characters don't feel very developed though. We don't know much about a lot of the characters. The readers didn't get to know Beatrice and Rosalie well before they were killed. After their deaths, Kaitlyn decides not to get close to anyone else because they'll just die like Beatrice and Rosalie. She quickly decides against that though not long after she meets Kassandra, Aurora, and Delilah. Show little interactions and things that make her decide she does need friends.

🔪》Grammar/Spelling

The story has a few grammar errors, but nothing major. There were a few spots where the apostrophe was missing from the contractions.

🔪》Writing Style

The writing style needs work. Show the readers what's happening through descriptions instead of telling them. The events of the story don't flow well because of the readers being told what's happening. Descriptions and information could be worked into the story better. They're dumped on the readers at some parts of the story and don't flow very well.

🔪》Enjoyment

The plot is intriguing and I would like to see if they ever do escape. I don't know if I would read on though. The story wasn't very enjoyable, I just think it needs to be thought-out more.

🔪》Overall

Overall, the story has a lot of potential, the plot is interesting. The story needs to be developed and thought-out more. The story doesn't flow very well and information and descriptions aren't working into the chapters well. Make sure you're showing the readers what's happening instead of simply telling them. Don't rush through the plot, slow down and take your time with the events. Be sure you're staying true to your characters as well, like I mentioned with Veronica giving into everything Kaitlyn asked for. Good luck with your story!