review 2- LFS: Philia 1

cover- 10/10

SO BEAUTIFUL that i literally cried. 

it's like, if the aesthetics of the cover are on-point, you already got me hooked.

and i'm a literal sucker for blue-haired taehyung so...

(actually, i'm a sucker for any hair-colored taehyung so-)

title- 10/10

uh i honestly didn't know what exactly the word 'philia' meant, so i searched it up and: w0w. 

there are so many beautiful words and the fact that i don't even know half of them is a shame lmao.

anyway, your title is short and sweet, and i absolutely love it!

description/short summary- 8/10

there's a grammatical error in your description about which i wasn't very sure in the beginning, but then i contacted my friend and we put all the knowledge that our pea-sized brains hold and we found it!😂

"...would be different kinds of heartbreaks too, wouldn't it?" is incorrect. instead of 'wouldn't it?' it should be 'right?'.

i noticed some other mistakes too, but once proofread, it can be easily corrected!

i really like the way you include their quotes, it's aesthetic!🤗

plot- 8/10

i personally think that the story is going too slow for me?

like, i don't mind stretching on events, but it's like, sometimes, i just don't understand where the story is headed.

also, you keep narrating 3 different incidents in one current scene, so i think that worked as a major factor in confusing me.

i do really like the storyline as it is kind of new to me, so there's that.

grammar- 16/20

1) 6/10- there were many grammatical hiccups that i noticed throughout the story.

for example:

you had written 'its' where it should instead be 'it's' and 'your' instead of 'you're'.

also, the tenses were all messed up.

i think you have to really work on this so that ocd maniacs like me can enjoy your book better🤗

2) 10/10- the line distribution is good!😇

total- 52/60

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to @urprincess2be,

although i don't really get where the story is headed to, i think that the storyline is so unique and needs appreciation for the number of emotions that you try and integrate with every scene that you narrate as an author! 

with just a bit of editing here and there, i think your book is good to go!🥂

thankyou, and all the best!🌸

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