"And he connected our lips again. This time deepening it till my soul. The sensation of his touch, his grip around me, it sent shivers down my spine, in every beautiful way."

— daylight nerd, -hoseokism

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☼ TITLE (3/3 points): When I started reading the story, I honestly wasn't so sure about the title. Getting more and more into it, I changed my mind. The fact that he looks serious during the day, the fact that he's the nerdy one at the office but at night, he's always trying to get laid, made me understand why you decided on that title. Besides, there's also his little secret (that I won't reveal here) that also has a connection with the daylight (hehe, you know what I'm talking about).

☼ COVER (4/5 points): The cover is quite simple but I absolutely love the colors and the font used in the title. I WOULD ADD YOUR BOOK TO MY READING LIST IN THE SAME SECOND! I only recommend you change the font on your username or maybe put it somewhere else, like in the bottom of the cover.

☼ DESCRIPTION (5/7 points): I have one or two books in which my description is pretty much a part of the story, a dialogue. But I don't really recommend it. It's a good idea if you don't know what to write at the time, but in my opinion, you should change it and add something more. I like the question that you added at the end and it made me curious to find out a bit more about the story and of course, about Seokjin. Maybe write something about the girl as well!

☼ FIRST IMPRESSIONS (10/10 points): I'm one of those people who cries easily while reading a story and your first three chapters honestly caught me off guard. I started feeling really bad for the girl and what happened with her touched my heart in many ways I actually thought it wouldn't, it makes me so sad to see someone living like her. ANYWAYS, I really enjoyed the way you started your book and I loved the way you introduced Jin into the story. And I loved the descriptions! You're amazing at it!

☼ PLOT (23/25 points): I thought the plot was interesting. I mean, the nerdy one is also the dangerous one and that's kind of cliché, BUT I LOVE CLICHÉS. Most importantly, the fact that you added another cliché (his powers), turned your story to be not-so-cliché, if that makes sense.

☼ CHARACTERS (12/15 points): The characters were well described, but in my opinion, Suki changed faster than she actually should. After her conversation with Seokjin, I was expecting her to change and stand up for herself, of course, but I wasn't expecting her to do it so fast. And even though your story couldn't be real (IT WOULD BE SCARY IF IT COULD, EVEN THOUGH I'M PRETTY SURE JIN WOULD LOOK HOT AF BHDFVCD), I'd like to read at least some believable parts. Suki fell in love way too fast and I know she was heartbroken, she was vulnerable, but maybe it would've been better for her to get to know Jin a little bit more. And Suki's ex-boyfriend shouldn't have changed so fast; someone who has that kind of behaviour would never change so suddenly after being punched in the face. Do you understand what I'm saying? Other than that, I love how Seokjin's personality changed, AND I HATED SEUNGWOON, HE'S A DUMBASS, but I loved how slightly innocent he always looked and then BAM!

☼ YOUR WRITING STYLE (18/20 points): I really really really like the way you write. The descriptions are fantastic and I don't think you failed in any of them, you described every scenario perfectly. I feel like you should use some question marks sometimes, you should use more commas and periods because some sentences sound very confusing.

☼ GRAMMAR (13/15 points): You don't have a lot of mistakes in your story, but sometimes you start writing a sentence in the present form and change it to the past form. I do that sometimes too and I know it is hard to notice every mistake we have when you're writing, so don't worry, I get it. You also write some sentences that don't sound good and/or don't make sense. For example, "he exclaimed and I could just nod my head in response, if I would've spoken anything, I might have just ended up crying again." I understand what you mean with this sentence, but it doesn't sound good and I know it was probably because you were distracted and that's also the reason why I believe you have some other mistakes. (:

☼ TOTAL SCORE (88/100 points): My darling, I loved your story! I got excited about it just by reading the first chapter and that's really hard for me to feel towards a story! The pacing was great, except for Suki and Jin's relationship that, as I told you, in my opinion, it should have been a bit slower. Besides that, I love everything about everyone's personality, everything fits perfectly. And your descriptions, OH MY GOD, your descriptions are utterly fantastic, you have no idea how much I loved them! As promised, I'll be voting on your chapters with my second account, you obviously deserve it so much!

Thank you for joining me and I hope I wasn't too harsh :( I really enjoyed your book and I'll make sure to check your other books as soon as possible!

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