Lose It All by midnightdancexx

Title:
The title, Lose It All, is simple, short, clear and yet leaves thousands of questions that readers want to know. What's there to lose? Who is at stake with this loss? Etc etc...I think it's an amazing title and can lead to a great world building and amazing plot if used correctly (which I can tell you're already doing just by reading the first chapter). I wouldn't change a thing about the title because if a reader instantly wants to know more, you're good to go and you definitely accomplished that!

Blurb :
The title instantly made me go to the blurb and I think the plot and the idea for the book is great. I like how you started the blurb, giving a small background about the main character, Alice. However I had to reread the blurb a couple of times to fully understand it. I think some sentences are too long which makes them unclear. Such as, "Living with her Uncle Matt Jensen, who has recently been nominated for three awards, as well as having a thriving online presence and two brilliant best friends." It's too lengthy and too detailed for a blurb. It could be cut short or maybe even made into 2 sentences if you want to keep all the details. Moreover, the next sentence, "Francis Brownwale, negotiates a contract between himself and a prolific criminal Scott Harding..." Now this sentence is even longer than the previous one and should be cut short for the readers to understand it better. I like how you added descriptions about each character which shows you already have a certain idea how each character will act in the book, but make sure you keep it clear and concise for the readers since the blurb is one of the most important things to gain reads.

Aesthetics:
I love the aesthetic of both Alice and Matt. The quotes give a great way of showing Alice and Matt's closeness and the value of their family bond. I think the colors already give a reader some kind of idea how they are going to be in the book. Alice (light colors) which can represent goodness, hope etc...while for Matt (dark colors) which can represent mystery, secretiveness, darkness... or maybe that's just me overthinking it haha. However, I find both aesthetics pleasing, fitting and suitable for the book, but I do I wish there was a little more pictures of Matt to match how you did it with Alice.

Opening scene:
The first sentence hooked me from the spot. The action from the very start was a great way to show the readers you weren't kidding when you said it's a psychological thriller. The repeat of the "My sister is flatlining" is showing the distress and panic Matt is facing which you perfectly showed. Your writing has flow and personality which I like. I love how we already see Matt's caring side towards Alice. I wonder how they are going to face the grief of losing someone so close to them. It's a great way to connect this loss to the title of the book; it only shows the beginning of losing it all. I enjoyed the prologue immensely but, again, pay attention to the length of your sentences. Often, they are too long. But that's easily fixable. Also, grammar is pretty nicely done but there are times where I could notice mistakes. For example, "Alice, is that you". You forgot to include the question mark at the end. Now this isn't a big mistake but it does turn off the reader at some point. However, with just rereading the chapter I'm sure you could notice those tiny grammatical mistakes and easily fix them.

Overall, I enjoyed reading your book. You have a great start and I'm excited to see where it takes place. Thank you for letting me review your work and trusting me with critiques (: