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- Reviewer Minsha -
Title: 7/10
--> The title "Dangerous Love" would have caught my eye, I would say, any person who likes to read romance, action and dark stories will get attracted because it somewhat sounds like all three genres. The reason of cutting the marks is that it is written (BTS×READER) which makes people think who is the protagonist, or you say the main kead. Maybe they'll think it will just be an ot7 ft readers book and not what they think it is according to the title, so I woukd suggest to make it clear and write the name of the main lead, instead of BTS.
Cover: 7/10
--> I liked it, but I would say that it isn't the best or perfect cover for the story, and I would suggest to have the main lead's photo in the cover too.
Description: 5/10
--> It is fine, I would say it will attract people but it doesn't tell you anythung about the story or give you glimpse to give you diea what the story is about, it should have a scene from the story and 1 or 2 dialogues too.
Story line: 17/20
--> I am not really sure, what the genre is or the story line is, but it seems a myrder mystery which has romantic and dark genre mix too and fantasy as well. I would suggest to make the genre clear in the description or either mention something which makes us clear about the genre. But, the thing is I liked the story overall. So, I would say it is a good storyline if it is dark, mystery, romantic genre and if not then, it doesn't suit.
Characters: 6/10
--> The characters are well defined thetvare easy to understand and mix with but their emotions aren't clear so, the author needs to define the emotions more.
Dialogue Delivery: 6/15
--> The dialogues are fine, i would say. Sometimes she is missing the double quatations (" ") so she needs to work on that and her writing style is easy to understand and mix with but isn't attractive.
Grammar & Vocab: 14/20
--> The grammar is okay I would say. But, there are quite a few grammatical errors so they need to be corrected, the vocabulary is really limited so i would like it more if that is increased.
Total: 62/100
Weakness and strengths
--> The title is good, but it is needed to make clear who is the protagonist, or you say main lead. Other than that its good. Cover is good could be better I would suggest to have the main lead's photo too. Description needs to be edited, should have a scene and few dialogues. Genre should be made clear or the author should atleast give a hint of what genre it is. Emotions of characters needs to be defined more, needs to focus on grammar and writing style although it is easy to understand it should be more descriptive and narrative. Vocabulary needs to be increased
- Reviewer Koo -
BOOK COVER:: 8/10
Your book cover was well edited and the title was vivid along with the subtitle at the end. And it matched your theme which was 'RED IS DANGEROUS' or something like that probably.
TITLE:: 6/10
Your title was fine too, but it was common. Maybe try with a different one.
You can make the title sound better if you translate it to some other aesthetic language.
DESCRIPTION:: 9/15
Your description has some grammatical errors. But it gives the reader a brief idea about the stories.
But you could've added more to it, like, the quote which is "Never fall in love."
STORY LINE:: 15/20
Your story line was nice as it has a little bit of suspense to it.
CHARACTERS:: 4/10
Your characters lack description. You should provide more information about them, in order to help the readers envision them. Also, you should keep the characters practical as it's not a fantasy genre and they are all human.
DIALOGUE DELIVERY:: 6/15
Your way of dialogue delivery was hapazard. At some places, you out them in a script form, while in others you put them in passage form. You should maintain only one type of pattern.
Also, the dialogues seem okay for an introductory part, but not for giving the reader an idea of the situation.
GRAMMAR AND VOCAB:: 8/20
You mentioned that English is not your language and I could pretty well understand that. There were several grammatical errors.
For instance:
1) At some places I saw that, the word after a full stop did not start with an upper case.
2) A full-stop is placed within the double-inverted commas and not outside it.
3) Some names were written in lower case which is not right. A name always starts with a capital letter.
You can avoid these mistakes if you type your story out on a Word Document or Google Docs. They point out your mistakes and you can improvise them.
Your vocabulary also needs improvement. There are many fancy words that could've been used and saved you from writing extra words.
TOTAL:: 56/100
WEAKNESS AND STRENGTH::
You have many weaknesses, like grammatical errors, vocabulary and describing skills. But don't be sad as it is something every writer once had. You can improvise your weaknesses and become better than this.
And your strength is your creativity. Everyone has a different style of imagination and you do too.
Your story would be more fun to read if you can improve these points.
Good luck!
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