hermiosa_reina

- Reviewer Icy -

  𝙲𝚘𝚟𝚎𝚛 :: 9/10
I really like the cover. I really like how you blended a phoenix with Wei Ying, and the fonts are great as well. I don't have any problems with it.

𝚃𝚒𝚝𝚕𝚎 :: 2.5/5
The first part of the title is rather common. Though I get your meaning, excluding "The Phoenix" from the title would be wiser. If you keep it as a title, your book will not be attention-getting since in the original story, he rises and remains a demonic cultivator, but in your plot line, he does not because he harbors yang energy. However, as that is now his Nickname, you may also put "demonic cultivators." That'll get people's attention. If you insist on keeping it, look up a synonym for the word.

𝙱𝚕𝚞𝚛𝚋 :: 6/10
Because your blurb doesn't sound any different from the main plot, which is why people might not want to read it, my immediate reaction was, "Oh, someone just shifted the book from one site to another." I think it makes more sense to include the bit where he summons hell when he's furious and the guy turns up. Simply replace those dialogues with the dialogues from this section. The rest are great, and the writings after the summary, including the poetry, should be moved to a distinct disclaimer chapter because they appear to be far too jumbled and lengthy. Long blurbs, especially if they include disclaimers, are not welcome. You should use regular fonts.

𝙿𝚕𝚘𝚝 𝙰𝚗𝚍 𝚃𝚠𝚒𝚜𝚝𝚜 :: 20/25
It's a work in progress, but I'm thoroughly enjoying the plot and series. I like how you altered the conclusion, even though it was rather basic, because I prefer the original ending because it was more intense than this one. That lady kept talking in riddles, which was both aggravating and exhilarating for me, so don't worry too much about that, but do tone down the puzzles a little bit. I can't think of any twists, so I'll keep it in my library and wait to see what you have in store for us, because it's already drawing my attention.

𝙲𝚑𝚊𝚛𝚊𝚌𝚝𝚎𝚛𝚜 𝙰𝚗𝚍 𝙴𝚖𝚘𝚝𝚒𝚘𝚗𝚜 :: 10/10
Everything is excellent. There are no flaws whatsoever. I appreciate how you explain it, and I can feel your words through the screen.

𝚆𝚛𝚒𝚝𝚒𝚗𝚐 𝚂𝚝𝚢𝚕𝚎 :: 13.5/15
I like your writing style, however you over-describe some of the elements. If you write two paragraphs explaining the same emotion or incident, it becomes tedious; instead, keep it in one paragraph and shorten your descriptions of emotions and events.

𝙶𝚛𝚊𝚖𝚖𝚊𝚛 𝙰𝚗𝚍 𝚅𝚘𝚌𝚊𝚋𝚞𝚕𝚊𝚛𝚢 :: 19/20
Everything is correct, although there are a few errors here and there. Aside from that, your grammar is flawless. Because not everyone has a Ph.D. in English, I would advise using a few more easy words that readers can comprehend right away.

𝚁𝚎𝚟𝚒𝚎𝚠𝚎𝚛'𝚜 𝚃𝚑𝚘𝚞𝚐𝚑𝚝𝚜 :: 5/5
This storyline is so wonderful due to Lan Zhan's faith in Weil Ying, but you basically killed it in your work and introduced a new lead. Because I'm a Wei Ying fan, I automatically disliked Lan Zhan in your book. I really like it, so please update soon because I'm curious to see if WangXian will prevail or if another ship will form. However, be aware that you may have backlash for this, so be cautious.

𝐓𝐨𝐭𝐚𝐥 :: 85/100

𝐒𝐭𝐫𝐞𝐧𝐠𝐭𝐡𝐬 𝐀𝐧𝐝 𝐖𝐞𝐚𝐤𝐧𝐞𝐬𝐬𝐞𝐬 :: Your strengths are everything, but your complex vocabulary, over descriptive writing, and "controversial" plot line.

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