arcanusmin

- Reviewer Suzy -

Cover :: 9/10
The cover is pretty and eye-catching. The blue theme relates to the plot. However, Taehyung's expression can be more peaceful/ exciting rather than a dull one. As in, use a pic where he is smiling or reflecting a peaceful vibe.

Title :: 3.5/5
Pretty good and accurate but I'm a sucker for philosophical titles. Imagine coming across a book titled, "Married to the mafia", and your mind automatically judges it to be a cliché book? I was somewhere near that when I read the title but the book is latent gold. Try going for something a bit more rare and descriptive about Taehyung. Maybe something related to his necklace.

Blurb :: 7/10
Eye-catchy, short and interesting. I'd be lying if I said I didn't internally wiggle my eyebrows at the blurb. It gives those teasing and *ahem* playful vibes while the book isn't actually a smut/ romance flooded one. It's counteracting the pure (I don't know how long it's lasting) and the relatable plot. However, I'd call this a pretty good blurb. Do consider adding subtle details about Haewon.

Plot and Twists :: 15/25
The story has a lot more things ahead so I cannot possibly judge this particular sub topic right now. Nevertheless, the twists I have found interesting and alluring are Taehyung's side of relationships. Like Jungkook being his friend or his sister. About the plot, it's subtly unique and absolutely well written.

Characters and Emotions :: 9/10
Whether it be Haewon or Taehyung, her uncle or Jungkook, all the characters in the book are hilarious and relatable at another level. They aren't bipolar or behave opposite to their natural persona. They're amazing.

Writing Style :: 14/15
Where do I start? Haewon being my soul animal or her uncle being the twin brother of my uncle? Nevertheless, your writing style is something I haven't come across in a while. Frank, hilarious and descriptive. I see nothing lacking but there are a few paragraphs in the book which weren't that understandable. For example the serpent part in the first chapter and a few more paragraphs. Not sure if it was only me though. The dialogues, the pacing and the descriptive writing won my heart.

Grammar and Vocabulary :: 18.5/20
I didn't find many grammatical errors except a few. Your vocabulary is diverse and authentic. Good work there.
The usage of question marks and exclamation marks. When they're used together, make sure that the question mark is first and exclamation mark is second.

ex: Why couldn't my father do it himself!?

Correct: Why couldn't my father do it himself?!

Few typos / miswordings

We're instead of were

Reviewer's Thoughts ::  5/5
I rarely mark any book a perfect score here but I can absolutely see you having a bright and promising future. Not to forget the fact that your book is well written and characterized, I'd love to read more from you.

Total:  81/100

Strengths and Weaknesses ::
Writing style. It's fabulous. Hmm maybe write out the story in a different setting since it's all about Haewon and her school. As in, just have a mere change of surroundings once in a while. That'd widen the readers' imagination spectrum and will also enhance their interest.
Wishing you good luck with your work, this was all. Thank you.

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