Author : fiarfn

Reviewer : ScarletHeartFictions

• COVER : 7/10

The template of the cover and the mood is well chosen and goes well with the theme of your book. But as a wattpad cover it fairly blends in and doesn't stand out among the storm of books. I would suggest you to either change the color of the background to maybe a soft yellow, or add colors to the pictures you've chosen. Also, instead of the 'first novel', I would recommend a subheading, you even have such a great one with your sunflowers concept. This would not only enhance the mood of the cover but will also fill it up, not to make it look empty or bland.

• TITLE : 9/10

Once again, the title goes wondrously well with the mood and theme of your book. Amazingly done! But my only concern is that since you mentioned that 'Sucré' is the name of Oscar's coffee shop and as of now (five chapters) there has been only one encounter at Sucré. I'm afraid that if that place is not important enough to the plot, it will fade away for the readers and will not be able to garner the focus as the title. If it has a significant effect, then no worries at all!

• BLURB : 9/10

It's hard for me to develop liking for a blurb since they are hard to maintain, but yours definitely stole the show. It is beautifully written and gave me an honest idea of the mood you're going with your plot. There were just a couple mistakes that I would love to be corrected ;

In the line 'there are bunch of things Tara never imagine…'

You missed 'a' between 'are' and 'bunch'. Also, 'imagine' should be rewritten as 'imagined'.

Moving on to the dialogues, you wrote 'it's me who bring up the joke this time.'

'Bring' is referring to a singular person, hence 'brings' would be correct.

And then in the last paragraph 'offer' should be spelled 'offers' since once again it refers to a singular subject - high school.

• CREATIVITY : 8/10

The book was creative in it's own way, and that made it all the more special to read. Your writing style and capability as an author really came through and that is commendable. One thing that I have mentioned in all my reviews up till now is that there were little to no descriptions. Now I'm not someone who is a big fan of too many descriptions but I would love to see some from you so that I can get drawn towards your play of words and can see how creatively you can imagine scenarios and your world. One thing, though small but something I've never seen in any wattpad book before is how the male protagonist is a foodie. It's always the girl and this felt like a breath of fresh air to me!

• PLOT : 12/15

I said this before and I'll say it again, I love your plot and it's whole mood. Apart from a few places where a little more descriptive writing would have helped me completely get involved, which I was not able to do without, it was pretty well maintained.

I also love the small paragraphs that are placed in the beginning of chapters. Great job!

• CHARACTERS : 8/10

The characters already have an impact on my mind and I feel that that bit is highly commendable. I also adore Tara-Jane and Jeremy, and the relationship they share. Though you have introduced a lot of characters, still all of them have a distinct image in my mind. The only problem is that though the image is distinct, it's quite vague which is the usual problem faced when a lot of characters are introduced in the beginning. And this is where descriptions come through once again - get into Tara-Jane's friends and her relationship with them just a tad bit more. No need for doing much since as I said, they already have a distinct image for me but a little more would help me associate and relate with them all the more. Also, being the protagonist, I expect to get more detail about Jeremy's exterior and interior selve, his thought process, looks etc. I feel that you still have a little more space with him that you can fill.

• GRAMMAR : 5/15

The grammar was lacking a lot. The tenses were constantly shifting from present to past and past to present. There were other mistakes that I observed with it, including incorrect form of verbs and spellings. The vocabulary usage and sensory details could be also improved a great deal.

• COMMUNICATION : 2.5/5

This could definitely be worked on. Though you did reply to some comments, others were left unattended.

• OVERALL IMPRESSION : 12/15

Minus a few marks for the grammar and descriptive writing, I loved everything about your book. From the characters to your plot, it all felt like a breath of fresh air to me. Well done. I would only encourage you to work in your English a little bit by reading and writing more.

• TOTAL : 74.5/100

Since I rarely allot full marks, this is a great scoring from me!

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