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👉REVIEWER KOO👈

BOOK COVER:: 9/10

It matches the dark theme of the story, well-edited and it made me interested. So if someone sees your book as an advertisement, I suppose they would be willing to click on it. (And if not, then they have a bad choice )

But, the subtitles at the corner are not pretty visible. Maybe make them bolder?

TITLE:: 9/10

The title too, is justified with your story, as it revolves around a masked killer (hope I didn't give a spoiler ).

DESCRIPTION:: 14/15

Your description was short, not giving away too much, and it made me intrigued and click the read button (I almost jabbed it).

STORY LINE:: 19.5/20

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THE STORY LINE. BISH, THE STORYLINE IT'S-

Ahem- *clears throat * *takes deep breath *

Okay, so the storyline is really great. And I mean it. It's a pretty rare plot and I really liked the way you've conveyed it to your readers.

Also, in a mystery-thriller like this, maintaining the suspense and keeping the readers confused while putting every clue right in front of them to infer, is a huge task. And you've done it really well.

I've taken out just 0.5 marks because, in some chapters you have added some crack; but I feel you shouldn't have. Because it's a moment of intensity, and you should keep it like that.

If you want to relieve the readers from the intensity of the chapter, you should add the crack in the next chapter or towards the ending - not in between.

DIALOGUE DELIVERY:: 13/15

The dialogues are really nicely conveyed. Some are to show the present condition. Others are so deep, they hit the feels.

And that's an achievement as a writer. For you to hit the emotions of your readers.

I have taken 2 marks, because some parts I felt didn't kind of...mae sense, or better said, were not appropriate.

GRAMMAR AND VOCAB:: 18/20

You mentioned in one of the author's note, that English is not your first language. But despite that, you have done a pretty decent job.

There have been minute mistakes here and there. And to avoid them I would advise you to type it out first in a Word Document and then copy/cut-paste it as your drafts. That's what I do.

And here's a correction: You don't put the comma BEFORE the double-inverted comma in a direct speech. You put it AFTER the inverted commas. And there should be a space after commas.

TOTAL:: 92.5/100

WEAKNESSES AND STRENGTHS::

From what I understood after reading your book is that your weakness is the grammar and a few punctuations. Not a great witness. It's okay to make little mistakes. As I said, if you type your story in a Word Document, then that weakness will be covered too.

And your strength is what you should be happy about.

Inking emotions and feelings into words is a big job and many can't do. But you have.

Your use of words is miraculous and hats off to you for that.

👉REVIEWER SEMI👈

Book cover: 9/10

Title: 10/10

Description: 14/15

Story line: 19:20

Characters: 9/10

Dialogue and delivery: 15/15

Grammar and vocabulary: 18/20

Total: 94

strengths and weaknesses: Let's start with strengths. Sooo your cover is damn pretty It really attracted me. The title is also eye catching also the description so first impressions was a strength of your book. Next is that the way you write the book, writting style I really like it. The way you use a lot of words to describe is great. Weaknesses, hm I would like to suggest to add a mask to the swan of the story that you referred in the story and edit it so it suits more and large the font of the subtitle and make it suit the black space where you have placed the subtitle in the cover.So I think it might look more pretty. For plot I would like to say to write it in a way the way readers get more curious. End it with a cliffhanger. Grammar problems are very rare. Characters are very interesting too that they have a dark past and somehow I have a feeling that jungkook and Jimin have a link in past too. Emotions can be expressed more. More a way that it can feel right into the heart of readers. Apart fron that a great story, loved reading it!

-daisy_kxx-

Yang_semi

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